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what if it's not real
anymore

and we're just
lying to each other?

going through the
motions
because we
enjoy them

and nothing more?

what if you're not
perfect

and i'm not
perfect

and when we told each
other we were
perfect
we were secretly lying to
each other and
now everyone can
see it?

what if i just
lied to you because
i'm scared of
loosing you?
(you're perfect)

and i can feel us
slipping

i know we're
slipping

but i don't know
how to fix it?

and i don't know
if i want it
to stop?


what if it's
true and you
read it and don't
say anything about
it (again)?

or what if you
do read it

and say
something
about it

and i
lie to you
about it (again) ?

what happens then?

what happens if i tell the truth?

i know
what happens
and know i don't
want it to.
(do i?)

so i won't share
this with the world
just yet.

not until i know
for certain that
everything's
okay.

everything is not okay
:icondonotuseplz::iconmyartplz:

created: 5.13pm 15.06.2009

edited, time of post: 12.34am 25.07.2009

i know. it's pretty long for me.
thoughts?

edit: 9.40 am 26.07.2009
changed
"i know
what happens
and i don't want
it to happen."
to
"i know
what happens
and i know i don't
want it to"
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:iconsorrow-of-vae-victis:
Made me shiver with uneasiness.
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:iconmeghan-solo:
meghan-solo Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2011
yeah, it sucked
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:iconigeboo:
Igeboo Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2009
O-some!!!!!
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:iconmeghan-solo:
meghan-solo Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2009
thanks
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:iconscottjamesprebble:
scottjamesprebble Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009
Love is complicated isn't it.
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:iconmeghan-solo:
meghan-solo Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009
always
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:iconseraph5:
Seraph5 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
i love it. it's raw human emotion and it's real. it's complex but simple. fantastic and true.
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:iconmeghan-solo:
meghan-solo Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009
thank you beautiful :heart:
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:iconseraph5:
Seraph5 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
no problem lovely!
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:iconhokeywolfe:
hokeywolfe Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009
Still like it. :nod:
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:iconmeghan-solo:
meghan-solo Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009
still glad you do :)
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:iconhokeywolfe:
hokeywolfe Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009
:D
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:iconhokeywolfe:
hokeywolfe Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009
Its like the director of The X-Files said, "We give you something then we turn around and take it away." You give the reader a thought then negate that thought. However, it very true to how life is. And, when we're in the early throws of a romance, we tend to be on our best behavior.
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shaunathanblaze Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009
i think you did a good job of showing the complexities of human emotions in this one, there are two small things i would change though,

"i know
what happens
and i don't want
it to happen.
(do i?)"

i think i would remove the word happen, and leave it as " and i dont want it to." there is quite a bit of repetition in this poem that works but i think "happens" and "happen" are too close here and it would flow smoother without it.

so i won't share
this with the world
just yet.

i also don't think i would start this with "so" the "so" makes it sound like you just came from a stronger conclusion but the lines above it are filled with doubt.
those are my thoughts hope it helps :)
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:iconmeghan-solo:
meghan-solo Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009
okay, i have edited the first bit you suggested and i think it is a much stronger phrase now, what do you think?
"i know
what happens
and know i don't
want it to."

which in turn justifies the "so" at the beginning of the next one :aww:

yes?
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:iconshaunathanblaze:
shaunathanblaze Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009
honestly i think this is the first time anyone has ever replied to my criticism in the 7 years ive been on and off of here haha :aww:

but ya i think that fixes it, it does make it stronger and the "so" doesn't feel out of place
nicely done!

glad i could help and you liked my suggestion :D
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:iconmeghan-solo:
meghan-solo Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009
thanks :)
i always take peoples suggestions into account and i wasn't really happy with that bit anyway :) you helped make it fit, thank you!

:hug:
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:iconhokeywolfe:
hokeywolfe Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2009
*BEAUTIFUL* as always! :nod:
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:iconmeghan-solo:
meghan-solo Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009
thanks
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